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写作无非篇章+逻辑+遣词造句

篇章

People who read books for pleasure can be better developed in imagination and language skills than those who watch TV can. Do you agree or disagree.

第一段背景+立场

At the moment/ at present/ currently/ nowadays/ right now / for now recently/ lately

It is apparent/ it is beyond obvious/ it is generally perceived/ it is well admitted/ it is profoundly recognized/ it is boarded accepted/ it has been pointed out

A considerable proportion of the public holds/ a large amount of the public argues/ a wide range of the people believes/ an increasing number of people acknowledges / a great deal of global citizens claims/ the majority of the people supports the idea/

However, I truly do not think so. But, I do not think it is the case.

Yet, I am afraid I cannot give my approval. Frankly speaking, I totally disagree with such an argument. To tell the truth, my personal view contradicts the matter.

Honestly, my personal opinion differs vastly from that of others.

As far as I am concerned, the claim is flawed.

As a matter of fact, I am inclined to oppose such an idea.

It has been pointed out that a large amount of the public argues book readers tend to imagine and learn languages better than couch potatoes. As far as I am concerned, the claim is flawed.

第二段让步段(相反观点+理由)

…..because (as) they are not without good reasons/ since several reasons can be concluded/due to the following reasons

….the most immediate reason is that/ for one thing/ a direct reason is that/ initially/ in the first place

.…the second one is that/ the next one is that/ for another thing/ secondly/ then/ afterwards/ after this/ subsequently …the last one is that/ the final one is that/ as a final point/ lastly/ eventually/

Undoubtedly, an increasing number of people acknowledge that reading is more beneficial since several reasons can be concluded. The most immediate reason is that reading itself is a way of learning language. Afterwards, one can imagine when reading artistically written words.

第三段主体段（自己观点+理由）

However...

论点1 In the first place 举例For example…

论点2After that…引用According to …

论点3 What is more… By way of contrast…对比

第五段结尾段

In conclusion/ in summary/ to sum up/ to summarize/ on the whole/ altogether/ all in all/ overall/ to put it briefly/ in short/ to make a long story short

… although/ even though/ despite the fact that/

… I firmly stick to my own belief/ my argument stands/ I have fully approved my reasoning to be correct/ I have made it clear that…

Overall, despite the fact that a wide range of the people believes in the benefits of reading, I have made it clear that watching TV has a more positive impact on one’s development of imagination and language skills.

逻辑

学生习作1

Furthermore, the living condition may base on the financial support. As I have said, the prices of houses are getting higher while most of us can not afford them. By storing most of their wealth in real estate, many Chinese households have become house slaves. As a result, here comes the vicious circle. Deprived person’s regular income, they may get nothing left after paying the loan, which contributes to a lower quality of daily life. By way of contrast, apartments are more economical.

查理熊修改

The next factor to be considered is money. Nowadays, a sad truth is that houses in China are too expensive to afford. As a result, many Chinese house owners become house slaves, paying a large proportion of monthly income for nearly a decade for housing loan. A person like that usually leads a humble life as the rest of his income could barely support a decent life. A simple calculation here, a typical three-room apartment of the city I live costs approximately 800,000 rmb, while a two-storey house costs 2,000, 000 rmb. What is the difference? 1, 200,000 rmb – enough for a ten cars or 200 iPhone 5! Clearly, one can save so much and really start living if he/her chooses to live in an apartment instead of house.

学生习作2

However, the drawbacks of living in houses are beyond obvious. In the first place, houses are much more expensive than apartments. If someone without very decent pay tries to afford a house, he or she will have to stand the financial pressure. In the second place, the bigger the house is, the harder for the owner to clean it. Consequently, the owner is supposed to spend a lot more time and energy on the housework, where their good mood will soon wane to extinction. In the third place, living in houses blocks the way of exchange visits and daily communications between neighbors. In contract, living in an apartment can keep you always informed of what is going on around. Additionally, it can also cultivate your communication skills and the character of tolerance. As a result, you are likely to make more new friends. Last but not least, living in houses is neither convenient nor safe enough, especially when you lack something or are in trouble. In other words, only when people get together and help with each other can we build a harmonious neighborhood where the living standard is improved too.

查理熊修改

However, the drawbacks of living in houses are beyond obvious when finance, maintenance and security issues are considered. In the first place, if someone without decent pay takes out an overdraft to fund a house, he/she will have to stand the financial pressure for years or decades in as much as houses are much more expensive than apartments. In the second place, the bigger the house is, the harder the maintenance is. Consequently, big-house owners sometimes spend time and energy on housework to such an extent that the commodiousness/ownership becomes exhaustive burden rather than a luxury. In the third place, house owners communicate all the less because they rarely have a chance to acquaint

the next-doors, let alone home visits. Whereas, on the other side of the picture, neighbors in apartment buildings, greeting each other so often, are always kept informed of what is going on around. As such exposure generally enhances communicative skills and tolerance, one is more likely to develop new friendship. Last but not least, house owners will find it inconvenient or insecure when needing a helping hand. In other words, than sticking with each other and lending a helping hand nothing can be more significant in building a harmonious neighborhood favoring the quality of living of each individual within.

遣词造句

2B: 三个简单句

The man was driving a car. He looked outside the window. He thought it was a nice day. 普通：定语成分+ 状语成分

The man driving a car thought it was a nice day when he looked outside the window.

文艺：状语从句变形-介词+分词

The man driving a car thought it was a nice day at looking outside the window.

浪漫：垂悬分词结构

Looking outside the window, the man driving a car thought it was a nice day.

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