【11】(161110)【第二节课的范文】复盘这个文章

Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

选择一个最好的开头段：

A Education holds the key to our career success because it allows us to acquire job skills and build good character. In my view, schools should teach young people how to act as valuable members of society and work as good employees, although this may not be beneficial to their personal development.

B It is widely believed that schools should give priority to teaching children to be good citizens and workers. Individual education can help students cultivate some capabilities to get career success in the future, but I would argue that to be a good person is the pricinpal step.

C These days many schools have paid more attention to make young people become good citizens and workers. Although personal skills and education background are important for them, I believe that people with good ethics is likely to achieve success in their career.

答案：选A。

B上来就是一个套句，然后cultivate capabilities, principal step都是错的。C的语法也是问题，attention to 后面加名词，后面的personal skills, good ethics这些不清楚指代题目哪个关键词。

If children can learn how to respect others and obey rules at school, they can build a good relationship with others in the workplace and work more efficiently in future. School rules require children to behave in acceptable ways, and some behaviours, such as interrupting teachers, are not permitted. Therefore, they would understand how to respect their colleagues or supervisors and work closely with others. In contrast, young people are self-centred and likely to have arguments with colleagues, if the education system focuses on individuality and personal success.

Young people who improve job skills by attending school can also find employment easily and have a reasonable quality of life. For example, some

countries require workers to master IT skills, and this is why they should improve computer literacy in the computer class. In addition to this, the school curriculum should include language courses, when a country places value on young people’s ability to use a foreign language to communicate with foreigners. If schools run courses that suit the interests and talents of students only, the younger generation might not have skills to adapt to the modern world.

On the other hand, educationalists should be aware that students who can develop their own talents can achieve successes in their careers. A broad range of courses should be provided to ensure that children can discover their talents and develop competence in their favourite subjects. Schools can organise competitions and matches to allow high-achieving students, especially those who show creativity, to outshine others. They might not be able to succeed in an environment where they are trained as workers and citizens to abide by rules strictly.

In conclusion, it is acceptable to teach young people how to act as upstanding citizens and productive workers, although the personal needs and interests of people should be considered as well.

复盘的要求：

1 所谓的复盘，就是不看课堂的范文，自己按照ABC写一次。可以使用词伙，也可以不使用，自己写出来

2 确定至少两种拓展方法（按照我上课的方式）

3 规定时间（大概8分钟一段）

基础差的同学（就是整篇范文的结构和逻辑看不懂的同学），可以把范文翻译成中文，自己写一遍，对照范文

基础好的同学，可以口述复盘，就是自己看着中文，大声说一次，然后对照范文，提升一下自己语法、连接词之后，再说一次

写完后，对照范文，关注：

1 范文在哪里出现了关键词或者关键词的替换词去扣题？

中心句怎么写的，有没有出现关键词？例子有没有对应题目，和出现关键词？（优点？缺点？原因？影响？同意还是不同意？）

2 范文使用了什么拓展的方式？在哪里拓展？解释，举例和拓展？是否重复了内容？

3 范文使用了什么代词增加句子联系？

4 范文使用了什么词伙去避免中国式表达？和你的表达有什么不同？

范文的关键词是怎么替换的？用了什么替换的表达？

5 范文的句子结构是如何变化的？使用了什么连接词？什么从句？

6范文使用折衷的写法的时候，主要的立场是什么？如何在文字中体现这个立场？