广东省花县2016高考英语二轮复习 书面表达(点睛)浏览(1)

2016（广东）花县高考英语（二轮）书面表达（点睛）浏览（1）2016书面表达选练

某学校对中学生课余活动进行了调查，结果如下。请根据图表1提供的信息描述学生每天的课余活动，并针对图表2中任何一个数据中反映的情况写出你的一个看法。词数100词左右。

生词：图表：chart课余活动：after-class activities

【参考范文】

【广东省揭阳市2014模拟】读写任务 (共1小题，满分25分)

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

One day, while she was walking in the woods, a girl found two starving songbirds. She took them home and put them in a small cage. She cared them with love and the birds grew strong. Every morning they greeted her with a wonderful song. The girl

felt great love for the birds.

One day the girl left the door to the cage open. The larger and stronger of the two birds flew from the cage. The girl was so frightened that he would fly away. As he flew close, she grasped him wildly. Her heart felt glad at her success in capturing him. Suddenly she felt the bird go limp. She opened her hand and stared in horror at the dead bird. Her desperate love had killed him.

She noticed the other bird moving back and forth on the edge of the cage. She could feel his great need for freedom. He needed to soar into the clear, blue sky. She lifted him from the cage and tossed him softly into the air. The bird circled once, twice, three times.

The girl watched delightedly at the bird's enjoyment. Her heart was no longer concerned with her loss. She wanted the bird to be happy. Suddenly the bird flew closer and landed softly on her shoulder. It sang the sweetest melody that she had ever heard.

She finally realized that the fastest way to lose love is to hold on it too tight, the best way to keep love is to give it WINGS!

[写作内容]

1. 以约30个词概括短文的要点；

2. 然后以约120个词就“爱就要放手” 这一主题发表看法，并包括如下要点：

a) 以自己为例，简述生活中你父母对你的过度关注；

b) 你父母的做法对你造成了什么不良的影响；

c) 如果有机会，你会就此问题对父母说些什么

[写作要求]

1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原

文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

【参考答案】

【解析】

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

【亮点说明】文章简洁的总结了所给材料，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯，使用了词组：What’s worse更糟糕的是, Due to 由于，因为，To be honest说实话, let go of 放手，句式上也是富有变化：A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily.这句话用了定语从句和不定式做表语，For example, they won’t allow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping by myself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old. 这句话用了目的状语从句，Give me some advice just when necessary, and for most of the time, let me think for myself. 这句话用了省略句，

考点：考查读写任务类书面表达

2016书面表达选练

火车、地铁、公交车内的“低头族”越来越多，尤其是青年人，上车后很快拿出手机，不管路程长短，不论坐着还是站着，人人都眼睛盯着屏幕，有的人走路也在看手机…… 针对这一现象，发表你的看法。

注意：行文连贯流畅；低头族：phubber 词数：100词左右

【参考范文】

书面表达训练

假如你是李华，你的英国笔友John来信说，他的同桌经常打断他，向他请教问题，他担心会影响自己的学习。请你用英语写一封回信。

内容包括：1.给别人讲题也会提升自己；

2.人人都有长处和不足，可以互相学习；

3.帮助别人学习可以使他们树立自信，从而促进友谊。

注意：1.词数100左右

2.包括所有要点，内容可适当发挥。

【参考范文】

Dear John,

How are things going? In your last letter you talked about your recent worry about your studies, mentioning that your deskmate often interrupted you by asking questions. Now I would like to share my opinion with you.

First of all, there is no need to worry about your studies. When you explain something to others, you can get a better understanding of it, which can improve yourself greatly. So it is good for you. Secondly, as we all know, everyone has strengths and weaknesses. Although your deskmate is not good at lessons, he might do well in other fields like sports or art. Therefore you can learn from each other. In addition, top students can help others gain confidence by helping them with their lessons, which may help develop a friendship that both of you will treasure all your

life.

I hope my advice can help. And best luck with your learning.

Yours

Li Hua

书面表达训练

请你根据以下提示，结合生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文。we don't always get what we wish for, but we get what we work for.

注意：

①无需写标题；

②除诗歌外，文体不限；

③内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；

④文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；

⑤词数为120左右，如引用提示语则不计入总数词。

【参考范文】

As a saying goes, “a good harvest depends on the spring sowing”. What we get depends on what we work for rather than what we wish for.

There was a time when I was so interested in basketball that I even dreamed of becoming the best player in our school. Much to my disappointment, I was knocked out in the first round in one match. Luckily, my coach comforted me：“Don't lose heart!As long as you work hard, you are bound to get something in return.” Inspired by his words, I picked up my confidence and continued practicing. Eventually I was selected to be the best player in the school team and participated in more and more matches on behalf of our school.

It is our efforts not our wishes that contribute to what we get. Work hard now, and all our efforts will pay off.

【思路分析】这是应用文。要求学生就具体事例说明种植什么收获什么的含义。故用一般过去时和第一人称。

文章语言简练、语法知识应用灵活、要点全面。文中使用了when引导的定语从句修饰a time，so that引起的结果状语从句，inspired分词短语作时间状语，高级词汇和短语：on behalf of， much to one's astonishment，pick up等的应用为文章增色不少，恰当地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构紧凑。文章事件叙述清楚、语言简练、紧扣主题、堪称佳作。